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kmmck t1_iyt1jns wrote

Reply to comment by meowcats734 in [WP] After eons of refining your work, you summon the genie one last time. "Finally want to use your third wish? I thought the last two has taught you a lesson." You remain silent, and give him a dictionary-thick contract that cast the genie an unavoidable sufferings for eons, and inevitable death. by alacz

I HAVE GOOSEBUMPS

This is without a doubt my all time favorite genie story. First of all your world building was incredible. It was as if I could feel and imagine the thundering power of the mages and genies.

Then second of all, the conclusion to the story was great. Not only did you think of a 'torture' that would truly make the genie pay for its sins, but you also worded it in an inspiring way that really hit the point across.

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kmmck t1_iyt0pzd wrote

Reply to comment by DeneilYeong in [WP] After eons of refining your work, you summon the genie one last time. "Finally want to use your third wish? I thought the last two has taught you a lesson." You remain silent, and give him a dictionary-thick contract that cast the genie an unavoidable sufferings for eons, and inevitable death. by alacz

I completely understood what you were trying to say bro. I think the other people are just debbie downers. The story literally says that Finneas 'recites the wish he planned with his grandmother'. Its as straightforward as you can get.

As for what the wish actually was, the writing prompt already says it. Torture and then death for the demon.

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kmmck t1_iyszg8v wrote

Reply to comment by photoshopper42 in [WP] After eons of refining your work, you summon the genie one last time. "Finally want to use your third wish? I thought the last two has taught you a lesson." You remain silent, and give him a dictionary-thick contract that cast the genie an unavoidable sufferings for eons, and inevitable death. by alacz

I fucking hate genies. Thanks for writing this awesome story. Just straight to the point torture, with a funny punchline in the end.

The only comment I would give is that I wish you spent more time portraying the genie as afraid or begging for his life or something like that. This way the revenge would have been more impactful.

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