housemon

housemon t1_ja2jnoy wrote

Reply to comment by HeliSieni in the penultimate girl by HeliSieni

Vanishing lines/perspective points don’t match.

The delineation between the wall, tile, and water is sort of nebulous and hard to parse.

No reflection on water.

Water level doesn’t match.

Top of the head is oddly flat.

Tongue doesn’t make any sense. Nor do the irises.
this may have been deliberate, but I can’t tell, so listing it.

Don’t get me wrong. Not saying your work is bad. Shading is fantastic and I think you have something to convey that is awesome. Don’t know what the hell you meant with the “penultimate” but no biggie. But the foundation needs work. Vanishing lines first is my recommendation. If you mess those up everything feels off. Good piece though.

Oh also no chin or jawline to speak of, and actually doesn’t look like a girl at all.

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