danielcw189

danielcw189 t1_j9ktgjn wrote

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danielcw189 t1_j9k2ee9 wrote

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danielcw189 t1_j9k27cq wrote

>The title suggests that because he didn’t have his clothes he wasn’t able to write his book

That's not right. The title saying "to finish his book he locked his cloths away".

> The word but should be in the title.

Where would you put it?

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danielcw189 t1_j9jbdg2 wrote

>This sentence is awful

What about it is awful?

>and nearly incomprehensible.

I don't see what is incomprehensible about it.

I personally would have added one more comma, or split it into multiple sentences.

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