bantamnerd t1_j5foyxg wrote on January 22, 2023 at 6:06 PM Reply to [OT] Poetry Corner: Chasing Dreams! by OldBayJ ‘’Love, don’t let it fade.’’ It's an encouraging request, and who am I, denying it? Relent - what I do best and nod a bit, and smile a bit, and give my very word that I'll continue writing, won't deflate you. Think I heard a stirring of false promises from back there in my head - but nothing worth examining. We’ll focus then instead on making up a story, something never seen before - it’s going to be beautiful, departure from the form and everything that makes it. I will pen a new cliche, and looking then will tell them that I didn’t let it fade So why are words not coming? There’s my head, and there’s a page but without a thing to link them. And I’m surely at a stage where these things should all be working. Rather doubt blank pages sell there's something burning brightly, they all say - I can’t quite tell if there’s anything at all in there. The spark is all used up, but the spark - I think - is all I have. Get by with that and luck and everything just sort of works? And falls out into place pentameter, most usually, but who am I to chase a different sort of meter when I don’t know where to start - I’m relying on a less-than-understanding of this art - and where, then, does it leave me? When it leaves me - if it was - ever here, that is, in earnest, and they weren't confused or crossed with blithe and bullish certainty. I hate to disappoint, but nothing's really special here: no reason to anoint my brain as bearing something that's a fire to be fed - there's better pyres out there, better warm to them instead of this iambic rambling. I fear their love's misplaced, and much more sure than I am that there's something to be shaped from all of this. Emerge now, words: be nonsense, please, just be - and spark or not, I'll try it out. I'll write. And fade? We'll see. Cheers for reading! Any feedback much appreciated :) Permalink 3
bantamnerd t1_j5foyxg wrote
Reply to [OT] Poetry Corner: Chasing Dreams! by OldBayJ
‘’Love, don’t let it fade.’’ It's an encouraging request,
and who am I, denying it? Relent - what I do best
and nod a bit, and smile a bit, and give my very word
that I'll continue writing, won't deflate you. Think I heard
a stirring of false promises from back there in my head -
but nothing worth examining. We’ll focus then instead
on making up a story, something never seen before -
it’s going to be beautiful, departure from the form
and everything that makes it. I will pen a new cliche,
and looking then will tell them that I didn’t let it fade
So why are words not coming? There’s my head, and there’s a page
but without a thing to link them. And I’m surely at a stage
where these things should all be working. Rather doubt blank pages sell
there's something burning brightly, they all say - I can’t quite tell
if there’s anything at all in there. The spark is all used up,
but the spark - I think - is all I have. Get by with that and luck
and everything just sort of works? And falls out into place
pentameter, most usually, but who am I to chase
a different sort of meter when I don’t know where to start -
I’m relying on a less-than-understanding of this art -
and where, then, does it leave me? When it leaves me - if it was -
ever here, that is, in earnest, and they weren't confused or crossed
with blithe and bullish certainty. I hate to disappoint,
but nothing's really special here: no reason to anoint
my brain as bearing something that's a fire to be fed -
there's better pyres out there, better warm to them instead
of this iambic rambling. I fear their love's misplaced,
and much more sure than I am that there's something to be shaped
from all of this. Emerge now, words: be nonsense, please, just be -
and spark or not, I'll try it out. I'll write. And fade? We'll see.
Cheers for reading! Any feedback much appreciated :)