VibesInTheSubstrate

VibesInTheSubstrate t1_je67aar wrote

Reply to comment by SilasCrane in [WP] You are a budget mage. While most of your colleagues use costly ingredients, rituals that take weeks to prepare and use a new spell for every problem, you only know a few spells, use common household ingredients and prepare rituals within minutes. They unjustly deride your work as shoddy. by Kitty_Fuchs

Very entertaining read and a fun interpretation of magic. Just mad I didn't guess the mishap at the end.

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VibesInTheSubstrate t1_je66h5d wrote

Reply to comment by New-Chance-7780 in [WP] You and the Other 'You's have finally managed to open an exit to the simulated world. One 'You' takes the first steps out, and vaporizes into nothing more than data- They were never real, after all. The threshold stands by in silent judgement, waiting for another 'You' to believe they are You. by Wise_Mulberry3568

Phenomenal! I (the reader) hope that things work out for Me (the character) the way they want.

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VibesInTheSubstrate t1_jchfwjy wrote

Reply to comment by lakija in [WP] By now it's obvious that one of the students in your dragonology class is a dragon. What's weird is that their grade is awful. by Kaleon

Incredible! I'm hooked on this story the same way Leila's hooked on that drag swag. Read and loved your additions too. It's sexy, it's smart, it's sweet.

Team up with an illustrator and you'd do SERIOUS numbers on certain art sites that I have definitely never visited and have absolutely no knowledge of lol.

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VibesInTheSubstrate t1_jcawea6 wrote

Reply to comment by AutoModerator in [WP] By now it's obvious that one of the students in your dragonology class is a dragon. What's weird is that their grade is awful. by Kaleon

Maybe the course material is wrong, due to genuinely mistaken research, deliberate misinformation, or a combination of both. The dragon student answers with the real facts but get marked poorly since it doesn't match the official material.

Come to think of it, going that direction sounds like something that'd pop up in the webcomic Vainglorious.

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VibesInTheSubstrate t1_j49v7y4 wrote

Reply to comment by Thunderingthought in [PM] Give me something out of the box, something abstract. It doesn't have to entirely make sense. I'd like to try to write an unreliable narrator, maybe? by Thunderingthought

Tremendous descriptions in here.

>I felt like I was walking down an aisle in a church, towards an altar. Or towards a casket.

That line gave me delicious chills. And the repetition of 'There was no one there.' really hammers in the confusion and paranoia.

I also liked the line

>The eyes observed me, simultaneously impersonal and engaged.

because it reminds me of a scene from this short animated piece called Puparia. Check it out on YouTube if you haven't heard of it, it has an otherworldly, abstract mood that I suspect you'd vibe with.

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VibesInTheSubstrate t1_ixv5ad3 wrote

Reply to comment by popejubal in [WP] The . . . creature . . . has been following you for weeks now, but nobody else can see it. It just sits there, staring, grinning. Then one day you look across the coffee shop and see a young woman with another one right behind her. Your eyes meet . . . by ImmortalJadeEye

I second this. I really enjoyed your take.

I would recommend starting a new paragraph when a different character starts talking. Having two character's dialog tags right next to each other can make the story a little harder to parse.

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