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LichStarfiter t1_j9iumvi wrote

This sentence is awful and nearly incomprehensible. I understood your intent after reading it three times but by then I was just frustrated with your post.

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danielcw189 t1_j9jbdg2 wrote

>This sentence is awful

What about it is awful?

>and nearly incomprehensible.

I don't see what is incomprehensible about it.

I personally would have added one more comma, or split it into multiple sentences.

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cham89 t1_j9jqbup wrote

The title suggests that because he didn’t have his clothes he wasn’t able to write his book because he was doing everything else. The word but should be in the title.

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danielcw189 t1_j9k27cq wrote

>The title suggests that because he didn’t have his clothes he wasn’t able to write his book

That's not right. The title saying "to finish his book he locked his cloths away".

> The word but should be in the title.

Where would you put it?

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cham89 t1_j9k2uk4 wrote

That was a typo I meant to say shouldn’t be in the title.

I understand the thought of putting away his clothes so he couldn’t leave and then would be forced to finished the book.

But the title says it, “forced him to do anything, but finish his book”

That reads as if he didn’t finish the book.

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danielcw189 t1_j9ktgjn wrote

>That was a typo I meant to say shouldn’t be in the title.

Oh, yeah you're right. I see it now. my mind must have jumped over that word.

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LichStarfiter t1_j9jngmt wrote

Good luck buddy. I have a feeling you're very proud of that confusing sentence.

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danielcw189 t1_j9k2ee9 wrote

You can't even answer a simple question?

>Good luck buddy. I have a feeling you're very proud of that confusing sentence.

I did not write it.

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