HeliSieni OP t1_ja2hl25 wrote
Reply to comment by housemon in the penultimate girl by HeliSieni
Well, don't leave me guessing. How would you improve it?
housemon t1_ja2jnoy wrote
Vanishing lines/perspective points don’t match.
The delineation between the wall, tile, and water is sort of nebulous and hard to parse.
No reflection on water.
Water level doesn’t match.
Top of the head is oddly flat.
Tongue doesn’t make any sense. Nor do the irises.
this may have been deliberate, but I can’t tell, so listing it.
Don’t get me wrong. Not saying your work is bad. Shading is fantastic and I think you have something to convey that is awesome. Don’t know what the hell you meant with the “penultimate” but no biggie. But the foundation needs work. Vanishing lines first is my recommendation. If you mess those up everything feels off. Good piece though.
Oh also no chin or jawline to speak of, and actually doesn’t look like a girl at all.
HeliSieni OP t1_ja2mvpp wrote
Thank you. Perspective is definitely something that needs work, I agree.
Sleevey27 t1_ja33cuq wrote
Perspective is hard. I’m struggling with it as well. I disagree with some of their points - especially the last sentence - and I certainly disagree with their tone. Scrolling through your profile, you obviously have a lot of skill and a good eye. And I think I know exactly what your title means.
HeliSieni OP t1_ja3yf9m wrote
Many thanks, your comment really brightened my day :) It's definitely difficult to pick up the potentially useful criticism when the tone is unkind -but that's to be expected when sharing on reddit
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