nobodysgeese t1_j49e7el wrote
Reply to comment by Thunderingthought in [PM] Give me something out of the box, something abstract. It doesn't have to entirely make sense. I'd like to try to write an unreliable narrator, maybe? by Thunderingthought
>Lies are a lot like that. When I felt the first orange lie slide out of my mouth, I caught it in my hand and slid it into my pocket.
There's lots of wonderful imagery in this, but this is the first one that reached out and grabbed me. This is some great writing!
Thunderingthought OP t1_j49h0hn wrote
Thank you! What are some other images you liked?
nobodysgeese t1_j49hpos wrote
All the ways that you described lies were great!
I also liked the overarching uncertainty from the narrator, where it isn't clear if he's stealing things (the things in his pockets?) and the buckets he's buying from Home Depot to store in his closet (because of the leaking floor? To hold the things he's picking up?). You nailed the unreliable narrator aspect, and while I'm not entirely sure what's happening, it's wrapped in such lovely language that the story sucked me in.
Thunderingthought OP t1_j49hzsi wrote
The things in his pockets were all the lies he tells every day, and thank you!
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