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aDittyaDay t1_j6phv3r wrote

Reply to comment by CritiqueMyWritingpls in [WP] You work for an organisation that works to prevent atrocities with the use of the butterfly effect, receiving bizarre orders from an ultra-intelligent AI that tells you weeks later what disasters your actions prevented and how. Recently, you start to suspect that the AI has ulterior motives. by Thisnameistrashy

I love this response! Great setup and payoff. Nice creepy vibes at the end, and I like the consistency. For a brand new writer, you're definitely on the right track. Only critique I can make right off the bat is grammar nazi stuff, like commas and run-on sentences and the like. Well done! Keep it up!

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