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flintoxicated OP t1_j6nc4xz wrote

Reply to comment by Raging_Flames10 in [WP]A vampire that selectively targets drug dealers and criminals because they know those people would be easy targets that wont warrant an investigation is confused to find out that the people of the city believe them to be some sort of vigilante that is ridding the city of crime. by flintoxicated

*Chefs kiss*
Really nice short!
Text is both concise and very flavorful! It has an almost professional tone, feeling like the internal monologue of someone older and giving the idea of a vampire that's been around for a good 200-300 years.

The rationalization of his actions does a great job to show a sliver of humanity through the character trying to rationalize them as cold practicality. Very good job on this!

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Raging_Flames10 t1_j6nfefx wrote

Woah, thanks!

>show a sliver of humanity through the character trying to rationalize them as cold practicality

Yeah, I first wanted the vampire to actually try to do good, but deny to himself that he does it for good reasons. But, I could not find a way to write that down and capture those emotions well enough, So I changed it midway to make the vampire more scheming and practical-minded. That's why you can sort of feel the morality of the vampire swing between good and evil from one paragraph to the next.

Anyway, thanks for the appreciation :)

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