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HrithikTheBoss t1_izrk2n9 wrote

Reply to comment by WilliamSyler in [WP] You get a knock. You open the door to see your nemesis, bruised and beaten, with your child. "Just saved their life. Need to go home and rest." Your nemesis turns to leave. You grab their arm. "Hang on. I want you to tell me what happened." You drag them inside. by Crystal1501

Some feedback is make more use of the fact that Valor and Darkstar are nemeses who seem to have put aside their differences… you could try to explain why that’s the case (some mutual goal)

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