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fearlessalphabet t1_iyzw2n8 wrote

Cool story and I like your writing! One nitpick is maybe Viktor could have stayed in the room when he turned on the UV light? Since both him and his assistant took the supplement so sunlight (UV) light wouldn't hurt them. Maybe this will make the ending a little more dramatic!

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SirPiecemaker t1_iz02bmn wrote

Definitely a cool idea, but I wanted to work in Claudia being shocked by her experience of seeing the Sun - had Viktor killed them right away, she wouldn't get a chance to.

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