ApprehensivePen t1_j0p52o1 wrote
The late summer's harvest moon cast a soft, yellow light upon the field. Below the heavens, below the wispy white clouds, below the soaring black hawk, below the trees that gently rustled in the wind, Argyle sat on a log around a dull green fire.
From his pouch, he pulled out more copper sulfate. He looked at it in his hand, the blue crystals shimmering in the firelight, before throwing it into the flames. It was the offering his demon needed.
The dull green flames turned into a vivid, almost acidic color. Then, they grew and grew until they were higher than the trees. The flames acted as a portal. Out from it stepped Argyle's old friend.
"You always look so ridiculous, stepping out from that tower of fire," Argyle said, as the flames died down and eventually disappeared entirely. "You're not that tall, you know."
Indeed, the woman who had stepped out from the portal was shorter than Argyle himself, who, although once a tall young man, was now a shrunken old geezer.
"You know I like to make an entrance,"—the woman tried to say, but was interrupted by a coughing fit. Though it was dark, the moon gave Argyle just enough light to see something shimmering on the woman's face. Blood?
"Here," Argyle said, handing her his waterskin. As she drank, she tilted her face upwards, allowing more moonlight to shine across her. Argyle noted how smooth her skin still was. His used to be like that. "How goes things on the other side?"
"The same as ever, I fear. Seventy years later, and nobody's learned a damned thing." She whipped the ground with her tail in frustration. "They're practically at our gates now." Argyle looked down at his hands. Seventy years, had it really been that long?
"But you'll survive, just like you always do," Argyle said, now touching the top of his hand with the other, feeling how bony and brittle he was. Where had all the time gone?
"I'm not so sure about that," the woman said. "This time it's especially bad. And I don't have you to rely on anymore."
Argyle wanted to apologize. But for what? It wasn't his fault he was human. This is just what humans do. They get old. They age. They leave everything behind.
"I'm not dead yet, you know." He held his arms open, motioning for her to come into an embrace. Telling her to feed.
Up close, she was as beautiful as ever. Argyle's heart smiled. It wasn't her powers as a succubus that was making Argyle feel these things, but the time they had spent together over the years.
In his bedroom, when he had initially summoned her, they had talked for hours. They learned they both were deathly nervous of the event. Argyle was worried he'd summon something that would eat him alive, and the succubus had been told tales of abusive humans who enslaved her kind. In reality, Argyle just wanted somebody to talk to, and the succubus just wanted reprieve from the war that ravished her home plane. It was the first time she had been brought into this world for something other than lust. It was also the first time she learned a human could make her laugh.
After that first encounter, he tried to summon her at least once a month. When he was young, it had been easier. There was more time for himself and less for work. They got to know each other, along with the differences between their worlds. In hers, a continual war threatened all living creatures. In his... well, humans weren't much different than demons after all. As he aged, though, their meetings became less frequent. Sometimes, an entire year would pass without the two seeing each other. He'd try his best to sneak in a visit in an inn, or dungeon, but the times were few and far between.
Eventually, Argyle retired. The time he so desperately yearned for as a working warlock now returned to him. But a lifetime of labor changes a man. Though his spirit remained young, his body did not. He was always tired. Things didn't work as they used to. And all around him, life changed as well.
As he held the succubus tight, as tight as his old muscles allowed, he knew he had little to offer. Gone were the days where he could give her every last drop. She knew it too, barely taking an ounce of the old man's energy. Their embrace was hardly more than one between humans.
"Come on," Argyle whispered. "You can have more than that."
"No," the succubus said, laying her head on Argyle's shoulder, sounding tired as well now. "I can't."
"At least rest, then," Argyle said. "I'll get a fire going. A normal one."
"That, I can do." In the demon's realm, there was no time to sleep. You always had to be vigilant. Spies and assassins were everywhere.
She was already snoring even before Argyle got up. He gently laid her down on the soft earth.
"Always so trusting of me," he said to himself, as he gathered up sticks and logs. Instead of using his flint and steel, he used magic to start the fire, not wanting to wake the girl. It crackled and popped and the heat felt nice against his skin. Even though it was summer, he was cold.
Argyle was able to see the succubus clearly in the firelight. The shimmering on her face was indeed blood. She was still bleeding, too, which was strange, because even the little energy she had taken should have been enough to heal a cut like that. Maybe she had taken nothing.
Also in the firelight, Argyle could see himself better. He turned his hands over and frowned. He was eighty-six now. His bones creaked. His body ached. His time was coming soon.
The succubus was curled up in a ball on the floor, tail wrapped around her, like a cat. Each sleeping breath she took was full-bodied; her lungs knew chances like this didn't come often. Argyle watched her laying there, and wished he could help. He cursed his mortality. If he was young, she wouldn't be hurting like this.
But, he knew, there was still something he could do.
He let out a deep sigh that was carried away by a passing wind. He looked up at the gigantic yellow moon, which was obscured by two thin black clouds. He thought about his life, and everything that had happened during its course.
He was alone, now. Nobody alive even knew his name, besides this girl asleep in front of him. The girl who had been there practically since the beginning. She was the one thing that never left his side.
He knees hurt as he bent down beside her. A lock of dark hair lay draped across her face. He brushed it aside, causing her to stir for a moment. Argyle held his breath. She didn't wake.
With a fair amount of difficulty, he managed to get onto his side, so he was face to face with the succubus. It reminded him of the first time they met, laying next to each other in the bed at his parents' house, giggling all night.
He lay like that for a long time, making sure this was the right choice. The sun began to rise, painting both of them in a golden hue. Argyle took one last look at her, and made up his mind.
He'd been wanting to do this for the longest time. For almost eight decades he'd wondered how they felt. It was always off limits, though, because of the consequences. Now, that didn't matter; finally, he'd get to know.
With his hand on the back of her head, he held his breath, and pressed his lips to hers. The lips of a succubus. As he felt his life leaving him, he couldn't help but smile.
They were just as soft as he'd imagined, all those years ago.
DominusEstSatietatis t1_j0piur3 wrote
This is absolutely amazing. It hooks the reader quite early, and although I can tell what the ending is, the emotional payoff is great. I hope to write like this one day.
Eats_Beef_Steak t1_j0pp5q3 wrote
Aggh you're writing is so good, I wanted Argyle to become a lich so he could survive with the succubus. But that was very nicely wrapped up regardless.
VonFluffington t1_j0pt1yv wrote
Never thought a story about an old man and a succubus would have me crying, but here we are. Thank you
RyanKneeya t1_j0p919s wrote
Beautiful.
Nesious t1_j0psnqh wrote
I love this take! It inspired me to write a little alternate version for myself while I couldn’t sleep, and I haven’t written for fun in years.
donutguy640 t1_j0qszre wrote
I look and no find. Y u no post?
Or DID you post, and I'm just a derp? :P
WoopieDooHereIis t1_j0rmf3x wrote
Dude.
donutguy640 t1_j14vlnx wrote
What?
WoopieDooHereIis t1_j1588t5 wrote
Just...don't type like that anymore. You hurt all of us.
donutguy640 t1_j1egwbv wrote
So, I normally don't anyway, but I wonder if you, or any of the other downvoters, ever tell anybody to "just scroll past" or "ignore it" etc., any time they don't like something. If you do, you're a hypocrite, and I hope you hit your thumb with a hammer. If you don't, I apologize for irritating you.
WoopieDooHereIis t1_j1eimxo wrote
No biggy I was just telling you why since ya said what. Keep your dick hard.
Nesious t1_j0sc87p wrote
Posted now as a subreply now! Not incredibly proud of it but I had fun.
MAXimumOverLoard t1_j0rc1f2 wrote
Proof?
Nesious t1_j0sc0tk wrote
Oh god LOL. I am not a writer at all so it’s super embarrassing, but sure why not. I never ended up coming with a name for the demon, so I left it blank, but it also somewhat works with the theme.
[This takes place after she falls asleep, as a retcon I imagine he summoned her a bit before dawn, having gotten up early and being too weak to do it any other time. Some smaller details are different but you can pick it up from context]
He watched intently as morning softened the shadows over her face. Decades of this same view flowed through his mind and out as a quiet tear. How many times had he seen that same breath, her head laid against the grass, a blanket, him? How many of these moments had he forgotten now?
He tried to push it all out of his head, but fragmented memories raced past his walls, unbidden. A musical laugh after a punchline lost to time, a content sigh, a wry grin and rolling eyes. He wished he could remember something more appropriate for the occasion, but the images warmed him against the slight breeze, and he couldn’t help a small smile.
Though they met quite a bit more often now, he still kept a few things to himself. His failing faculties embarrassed him, so he never told her that he forgot her mother’s name, or that he didn’t remember ‘that one time you…’ …what was it again?
While his body and mind continued to dull, she was as sharp as ever, and he wondered how much she remembered. If their places were swapped, what would she see, watching the slow rises and falls of his chest? What would she remember when that sight was nothing but a memory?
They had shared so much over the years. He hoped she would think of that time they went to the lake together a few summers ago, and…
The empty space that accompanied the warmth brought a sadder smile to his face.
“I’m sorry, I don’t remember anymore. And I’m sorry for not telling you about that… about, this.”
He never told her he didn’t have the power to bring her here again.
He hoped she would remember him, and forgive him. God, he hoped she’d be okay, and—
“No more hoping,” he chided himself. She had lived long before he did, and would continue to long after he died. He always knew she would be fine without him.
He slowly laid down by her side. But he did really hope she would forgive him.
Dawn was well underway now, and though she was a demon he always thought the light suited her quite well.
“Hey, ____, thank you for everything. I’m sorry. And I love you.”
She stirred, half-heartedly trying to open her eyes, but mostly failing.
Always a light sleeper, huh? He had wanted to watch her a bit longer. Maybe he should’ve said it quieter. But, selfishly, he really wanted her to hear it.
No more stalling.
He gently pressed his lips against hers and her eyes shot open in response. A succubus’s kiss is deadly after all. It wasn’t every day they were taken willingly.
His vision narrowed as her eyes widened. He could see her saying something, shouting now, but he couldn’t quite make it out. He saw her shake him by his shoulders, but he couldn’t feel them anymore. He saw tears of understanding begin to stream down her face.
Ha. Sharp as she was, he still managed to surprise her one last time.
He took one more look into that brilliant green.
I’m sorry. I love you.
And he was gone.
Nesious t1_j0sd4of wrote
I was thinking of those friendships we hold for so long that we forget many of the moments that they were built upon to begin with. Or at least I do with my garbage memory :P. I had an idea for how I'd do the beginning of the story (the summoning) as well, but at 4 AM I just wanted to get out the important bits of what I was thinking about.
It may be a touch too dramatic and have awkward word choice, but as someone who really never writes and barely reads nowadays I had a good time so big thanks to OP and such ^-^.
ApprehensivePen t1_j0stw5q wrote
I liked it more than mine! You should write more.
Nesious t1_j0t3xgh wrote
Oh thank you! I have a really hard time thinking of compelling characters and settings myself, so I really needed a good story to build off of <3
Jacky1111111 t1_j0spwdy wrote
Dude this was good and the dramiticness is fitting so don't worry about that but god this was amazing. Thank you for writer it brother made my night I appreciate it so much
Nesious t1_j0sq9o5 wrote
Aww thanks <3 glad you enjoyed it!
Jacky1111111 t1_j0srymw wrote
Do you have any other things that you've written that I could read?
Nesious t1_j0stcy5 wrote
Sadly no! Frankly I've never written a story for anything except assignments in high school English years ago, so this was rather out of character for me :P.
Jacky1111111 t1_j0sttoy wrote
Well if you ever write anything again try to remember to give me a shout I'd happily read it for ya
Beneficial_Ebb_3919 t1_j0w6964 wrote
This is really beautiful, and made me reflect on all the moments I've already forgotten with my wife ❤️
ShikakuZetsumei t1_j0q0ype wrote
Excellent take on the prompt. I have to wonder if his sacrifice made any difference in the end with the war on the other side :)
DaDragon88 t1_j0pgh94 wrote
Very sweet!
Hazel_Comas t1_j0plbe8 wrote
This one touched my heart
Grafenbrgr t1_j0pmqoc wrote
That wrapped up so well
ChiefPyroManiac t1_j0qa30q wrote
This is awesome! You might have meant ravaged instead of ravished, though. Ravish is to seize someone by force or to fill them with delight. Ravage is severely damaged or devastated.
Fitsuloong t1_j0rn6g2 wrote
Hi! May i convince you to write a part 2 with a little bit of knowledge? Because you know, in some settings a succubus kiss does indeed kill and steal the soul of the recipient, but if it is a kiss of true love (like this seem to be) and survives it (mayhaps some preparation ritual?) then the "victim" instead becomes into a greater vampire thats immortal, food for thought
MrRedoot55 t1_j0pv33u wrote
Astounding work.
renalga t1_j0qybhs wrote
What if because he didnt send her back in the end she could stay in that world and wouldnt have to fight in the war anymore
mark55 t1_j0rav1f wrote
At first I was like "oh no, a succubus tale..." then I was like "oh god my poor little heart."
SamuelVimesTrained t1_j0pv3p6 wrote
….. wow… awesome
fuckthisicestorm t1_j0qh8ai wrote
God, DAMN. 😭
Enasakoma t1_j0qdde4 wrote
Incredible, well done!
Phylar t1_j0s3xqu wrote
Ah. How sad she must have been when she woke up. Assuming she woke up next to him.
This courtship and friendship between two different beings reminds me of an old series I'll recommend below:
Still known as The Bartimaeus Trilogy it does have a fourth book. The writing and atmosphere are wholly unique.
Nalthanzo44 t1_j0sh59e wrote
Holy sweet Christ, this was beautiful. You painted such a vivid, wordscape of emotions, and I salute you. THIS is the kind of short story I strive to write. Simple, sweet, but deceptively impactful. Fucking amazing.
SergeantSkull t1_j0qztmn wrote
New character idea unlocked. Mind if I steal it for DND
Lord_Nivloc t1_j0qo7j5 wrote
Well done wordsmith
ItzMaddie74 t1_j0skclk wrote
This was amazing to read!
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