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laancelot t1_j1ewydx wrote

I had never been a productive member of society before the End. Time changes us all, as they say, and after a fashionable time off spent digging myself out of a pile of concrete, I came to the realization that the world had changed, and so did I.

The daycare was, at first, more an orphanage than a daycare. I gathered little survivors who had lost their parents. At first they were afraid, and they cried, but surviving the worst had made me a new man. I had gained patience and empathy, two traits I never though I possessed. One by one, they came to accept me as their foster parent.

After a fashion, some of their parents who they though dead found my little orphanage. They came to me with humble gratefulness and took back their kid. Some of them I never saw again, yet most of them came back on a regular basis. Everyday, during foraging and warring hours, raiders, nomads and techno-barbarians started using my services as a keeper. A children keeper.

There must be a word for that job, but I never bothered to learn it. Yet I did it splendidly. My orphanage slowly morphed into a daycare. My daycare became a haven of peace in a wasteland otherwise known for it's murderous ghouls, barbarians and mutants.

The parents would thank me, at first sheepishly, then earnestly. Mortal enemies would sometimes meet while on my ground, and they would ignore one another. Everybody came to know that the daycare was a new form of holy ground. A place of peace in a brutal world.

I still had to keep them in line from time to time, though. All children keepers must know that kind of parent:

"Mister Longshot? May we have a chat? I've heard little Wink speak ill of Tadpole's parents. It lead to a nasty fight between them."

"It has?"

"Yes. I could convince them to make peace after a while, so all is good, yet... could you please keep the warmongering talk outside of your kid's life, at least for a couple more years?"

"I, uuuh... yes, for sure. I'll be careful for now on. Thank you for letting me know."

"Thank you... who?"

The warlord shrank a little bit. Although being in my shadow, he started sweating.

"Thank you, Doctor Apocalypse. Thanks for everything."

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Space_Ferroth t1_j1fa3cr wrote

I like the implication that the narrator caused the End before becoming a children keeper.

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Ky0j1n t1_j1fkhez wrote

I wish someone would make this into a webtoon. I’d totally read it. Why’s he called Doctor Apocalypse tho?

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mvms t1_j1g9esb wrote

Pretty sure he ended the world.

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XanderJayNix t1_j1i4136 wrote

If he wasn't the one who ended the world, then he may have gotten the name because he has an alliance with the people of power due to watching their children, and can cause problems for anyone that causes problems for him.

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stopusingredditnerd t1_j1ginj2 wrote

"Time changes us all" wow that was a great main idea for the audience to hold on to the back of their minds as a start to your story. Big events in our lives can really radically change our core foundations, either for the better or for the worse. Great opening for any apocalyptic setting.

I also liked the first person view narrative, felt real and the main character seemed very likeable to keep the reader invested into reading more. Good job man 👍

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