Submitted by AliciaWrites t3_yrp2vp in WritingPrompts
Restser t1_iwemact wrote
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Hey, Dbootloot. An interesting reflection in which the MC draws on memories of his father and compares his own role as a parent, done by way of an address to his departed Dad. The brief mention of a son then a shift to a daughter was a bit jarring. The use of personal pronouns instead of names for the offspring suggests a distance that I think you did not intend. Some repetition (e,g, 'of course').
The tone is quite touching and brings out the inner feelings of your MC. I enjoyed reading your piece. Cheers.
Dbootloot t1_iwenvma wrote
I just looked back and see that I totally flipped pronouns for one sentence. That one leaves me a bit red in the face, hahaha.
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