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duelingThoughts t1_ivpt7hj wrote

Reply to comment by articulatedWriter in [SP] "I wish for supernatural charisma." "Done! You have two wishes left." "Only two?" by SpookieSkelly

Clever! Charisma isn't always about convincing people, sometimes it's convincing the right people. I also enjoyed the implication that because the charisma wasn't their own it essentially turned them into a puppet. Minor critique, I think the Mother Nature connection to death could use some work, I think that's the weakest of four tales.

Perhaps consider re-ordering it, as I feel like Mother Nature would be before the rest. Unless, the order isn't chronological but in order of precedence? I could see that.

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articulatedWriter t1_ivpuoue wrote

Appreciate the input 😁

I'll be honest I completely forgot I set up a timeline with the Bethlehem introduction but I personally don't see mother nature as always personified more so it was always a thing and at some point was given a voice that being the mother of mother nature, so before she made the wish it was just the way of nature, because death has to exist for her to wish none could die by the genies wish right?

So nature was a thing and until it was given a voice it had no reason now nature has a voice of reason which is mother nature. If that made any sense? XD she'd decide whose life is more precious to save if it can, edit: or if death would be more merciful

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FadeCrimson t1_ivrseuq wrote

Definitely gave the vibe that previous owners of the lamp effectively became god-like figures in their own rights through their wishes. Sets more intrigue and interest in the sheer scope of the genies abilities.

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articulatedWriter t1_ivrsory wrote

Hoped that would build the world without going further in detail, Ty 😁

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