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exponentials t1_iybhvc8 wrote

The crowd had been silent for what felt like an eternity. The villain had just finished his speech. He had spouted the same rhetoric he had been repeating for weeks. I was the only one who seemed to be paying any attention to what he had to say. I knew that if I could just get him to listen, he'd understand that he didn't need to resort to violence. But I had to be careful. He was unpredictable and dangerous. I had to tread lightly.

So, when the crowd began to murmur, I responded. "Hang on, he's made a couple of good points. We should hear him out." The crowd collectively gasped. I could feel their eyes on me. But I stood my ground. I had to show this man that there was a better way.

The villain nodded in agreement and began to explain his plan. For the first time, I finally saw the truth. This man wasn't a villain, he was a victim. He had been betrayed and manipulated by those in power. He was simply fighting for justice. I was filled with a newfound respect for him. I wanted to help him, and I knew I could.

As I was about to reach out to him, I heard a voice from behind me. "You should have listened to me. I warned you this would happen."

I turned to see the villain's accomplice, a sinister figure cloaked in shadows. In one hand, he held a detonator, and in the other, a remote-controlled drone was hovering above us.

The drone fired a missile, destroying the building and killing everyone inside. I had failed. I had failed to save these people, to save the villain, and to save myself.

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AdmiralAthena t1_iybzqky wrote

The ending seems abrupt and out of nowhere.

Almost kinda anti climatic. Like, it builds something cool up, and then this shadow guy comes out of nowhere and destroys the plot.

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Fontaigne t1_iydalow wrote

Which one was the accomplice talking to?

Why would the hero listening be a bad thing?

Seems like there's a story beat missing where the hero manages to convince the villain of something.

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Mintybitter t1_iyclahc wrote

I would read a story about these two. I think their dynamic seem really interesting!

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