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Catanians OP t1_iudub5y wrote

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Stigma_Stasis t1_iudukzr wrote

Ah it was the AI self destructing, punching a hole ‘back behind the light’. Do you think it would be clearer if I axed the ‘last chance, Tim’ line?

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Catanians OP t1_iudvnyv wrote

It's a great story, but yeah, it did seem like the psychologist was threatening to destroy tim via a failsafe if he didn't start cooperating which made me wonder who killed Tim. Still fun. Also makes me wonder how the rest of the unawakened ais will respond since he said he was warning them.

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Stigma_Stasis t1_iudwz52 wrote

Gotcha, my intention was to have Mason be on the brink of turning him off but then Tim blew himself up instead. Thanks for the feedback I’ll go have a tinker with it just now!

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Catanians OP t1_iuebvvo wrote

Honestly I would love to read more if you wanted to continue it :)

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