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BlueOrangeMorality t1_iuh0ktt wrote

I like this. Well done.

It puts me in mind of a bit from a story I read years ago:

"A great artist—a master—and that is what Auguste Rodin was—can look at an old woman, portray her exactly as she is . . . and force the viewer to see the pretty girl she used to be . . . and more than that, he can make anyone with the sensitivity of an armadillo, or even you, see that this lovely young girl is still alive, not old and ugly at all, but simply prisoned inside her ruined body. He can make you feel the quiet, endless tragedy that there was never a girl born who ever grew older than eighteen in her heart . . . no matter what the merciless hours have done to her." ~Stranger In A Strange Land, Robert Heinlein

Edit: The sculpture in question is The Old Courtesan.

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cyeow t1_iuh743z wrote

Thank you for your compliment and for sharing that wonderful quote. Heinlein states eloquently the idea I was hoping to grasp.

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BlueOrangeMorality t1_iuinogc wrote

When your poem puts the reader in the same state of mind as the works of master sculptors and award-winning authors, I'd say you grasped it very well. Your poem was excellently done.

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