Surinical t1_iu8le0r wrote
John was suffocating, drowning on the honey thick words. The frantic sensation lasted but a moment after he finished the incantation. As he hung weightless above the burning pentagram, he felt nothing. He was so desperate, he had resorted to fire code violations to end his loneliness. A spark of black fire, highlighted in white too bright to look at, twinkled at the top of the center candle as he dialed back on the gravity. Could it actually be working? No way.
Smoke began to fill the high-ceiling cafeteria, occluding the false skylight and staining the pastel stucco of this never to be finished all-inclusive paradise. He thought of all the rich saps that might never get to cuss out a waiter for under spooning their caviar or whatever. Almost enough to bring a tear to his eye.
“Attention,” called down an automated woman’s voice from above, vowels round as marbles. “Hot ash detected on muster group B, deploying suppression measures. Thank you for dining on August Grande Orbital Vista, stand back!” Hoses uncoiled themselves like whining snakes.
John looked about frantically, dragging a tablecloth to throw over the summoning circle. The black/white flame caught it instantly, sending a gout of blacker smoke to curl along the prefabricated arches.
“Hot ash! Hot ash!” the automated attendant bellowed, as sprinklers filled with foam began to spray, laser aimed at the candles. They dimmed lower every second.
“No!” John ran, unsure of his plan as he jumped into the circle, shielding the center flame from the foam with his body. The pain grew as the flame cut through his coveralls, then stopped, more than stopped. He felt great. Had he been afraid?
He wondered how anyone could be afraid in this warmth. A hand ending in long sharp nails reached up and touched his shoulder lightly, pushing him back.
“I’m very grateful, but you’re crushing me,” came a raspy woman’s voice.
John staggered back, getting to his feet. He tapped his chest, the burn didn’t go past the top layer of his uniform. He should still stop by the automatic med bay later, but it was hard to think about anything as he looked into the circle.
Other than the long black curling horns cutting through her silver hair, the sharp teeth resting on black lips, the almost talon-like nails on hands and feet and the fact she seemed to clock in at about 6 foot 9, she was the most amazing looking woman John had ever seen, real or holo.
She stood and brushed herself off, sending a cloud of soot up again. A small drip of more foam came from the ceiling in reply. “Ah,” she yelled, laughing. “Can you turn that off?”
“No, sorry,” John said, suddenly awkward beyond measure. This was the first human he had seen in over two years. But human wasn’t the right word, was it?
She stood at her full height and bowed, letting her smokey dark gray gown knock over two of the now thoroughly doused candles. “I am Arix, Princess of the Eighth Suffering, Legion Lure of the Blind! To what purpose have you summoned me, mortal?” she asked, hesitating as if trying to remember her next line. “That you might exchange your everlasting soul for my service?”
“Can you keep me company?” He asked, “this orbital station is so lonely.”
“Very well- wait really?” she asked, rocking her head back, raising an eyebrow, and looking him up and down. “That’s it?”
“What can I say?” John chuckled nervously. “I’m going a little stir-crazy out here.”
“Where are we?” She walked to a table by a window overlooking the titanic gas giant.” Holy shit, are we in space?”
“The most amazing vacation destination station in the galaxy,” John offered, following her like a puppy. “Or at least it will be once the striking shipbuilders guild comes here to finish it. The scale of the orbiting behemoth means it has to be assembled on location, smack dab in the middle of jack shit, and apparently, I was the only sop desperate for credits willing to cross the pickets and come out here.”
“So you’re all alone in this huge place?” she asked, stepping into the floral atrium. The demon looked like John did the first time he saw it. He hadn’t even seen a plant until he was nine. She dragged a claw across one of the apple trees. “How do you keep it running by yourself?”
“The automated systems do almost everything,” John said, grabbing an apple and taking a bite before handing it to her. She smirked and snatched it. “I’m really just here in case something fails, but there’s only so much one engineer could do anyway. Mainly I’ve been waiting for others to come, but I guess the strike’s still on and I’m stranded. I can’t access my bank account from here but I’m guessing I’m pretty rich by now, at least.”
“I see,” she said, holding the apple like a raccoon might horde a grand prize. “Do these work? Could you contact them? Your bosses?” She pointed to a row of monitors tucked behind a service wall.
“Password protected by the union, all the systems are,” John said. “I gave up trying like a year ago. Hey, do you think these air purifiers look like a techo laundromat?” John asked, pointing into the next room they passed. “I always thought so.”
She squeezed beside him to peek in. “Kinda yeah, but you’d have to feed your shirts in through the slit one at a time. I think they look more like the holes you stick your arms through at museums, and feel stuff you can’t see.”
“Wow, you’re right,” John said, smiling. That had never occurred to him.
“You know your soul is a pretty big thing to give up. Are you sure that’s all you want?” she asked, bending down to see him eye to eye.
“Yeah, I already feel so much better. All these thoughts bouncing around in my head were killing me. I even tried that thing from the movie where he painted a face on a ball and named it but my ball was an agitator from the pool and the cleaner system recalled it back after a few days.”
“Okay, it’s your soul. What do you want to show me next?” she asked, standing back up eagerly.
“Oh, you gotta see the karaoke room, the costumes in there are insane.” John said, eye going wide with his idea. “Wait, no, stay here and wait till I call you. You have to guess who I’m dressed like.”
“Alright,” Arix said, shaking her head as the man scampered through the hall. She had thought he was sly to sacrifice himself to save her but he didn’t even seem to know that meant he got his wish for free. Not a bad gig, besides. She was already growing fond of the human. This could be like a vacation.
She sauntered to the monitor terminal and bowed her head in unsanctified prayer. “Jaeryx,” she hissed in the abyssal tongue. “Find me a damned one, one who was a shipbuilder union member in life.”
“I have one on the racks now, Legion Lure,” the eager croaking voice came. "What would you like of him?"
"I need him to type something."
A severed and callous hand popped into existence and flopped energetically on the floor. She bent and picked it up before it could crawl away, holding it up to the terminal.
“Type your login details and I will give you a moment’s peace,” she offered cruelly, digging a claw below the cracked fingernail. The hand worked across the keys and the terminal chimed. John was still out of sight.
She dismissed the hand back to its suffering body and read the title of the first and only email sent to the station. “Station August Grande is abandoned in union deal. No further ships will be sent in or out.”
“Okay, come here,” John said. "Guess who I am!"
“Coming,” Arix said with a smirk, clicking the delete button.
/r/surinical
John-Lasko t1_iu8or0v wrote
Damn, I feel really bad that John was abandoned. Hopefully Arix will be good company.
Surinical t1_iu8tutz wrote
I hope so too
Drogonno t1_iu9u3py wrote
Worth his weight in gold! ehh I mean his soul!!
Collective82 t1_iubmkyx wrote
Nope you were right the first time! He got to keep his soul by trying to save her lol
GladResponsibility92 t1_iuijyjk wrote
How did he save her?
Collective82 t1_iuikwho wrote
He protected her from the fire extinguisher system .
>“No!” John ran, unsure of his plan as he jumped into the circle, shielding the center flame from the foam with his body. The pain grew as the flame cut through his coveralls, then stopped, more than stopped. He felt great. Had he been afraid?
>She stood and brushed herself off, sending a cloud of soot up again. A small drip of more foam came from the ceiling in reply. “Ah,” she yelled, laughing. “Can you turn that off?”
That second part to me says the system could hurt or kill her.
The5Virtues t1_iu91lyt wrote
Ooh, I love this. It’s wholesome from John’s perspective but still delightfully wicked from Arix’s, feels like a story that would be almost romantic but with dashes of the demoness deducing what terrible uses she could get out of a fully automated luxury space station, seems like the sort of place you could turn into a brand new kind of hell.
Yoerin t1_iuazqb5 wrote
10 years down the road, John is now working as an engineering teacher for hell instead. Who would have guess that hell would love to have that kind of technology?
MoonDog-2077 t1_iu9h3ej wrote
Yeah. She is a demon, after all.
thescotchkraut t1_iu9d44g wrote
On the one hand, great story. On the other, don't be a fuckin' scab John, and maybe you wouldn't be here.
Surinical t1_iu9dno1 wrote
No doubt, the shipbuilders guild conveniently forgot about John being on assignment specifically for that reason.
thescotchkraut t1_iu9fsrs wrote
Maybe if the company gave a rat's ass about their employees (say, send a check-in to their scab who hasn't reported in since the change over) the guild wouldn't be striking.
And yes, I do realize that I'm upset at a fictional company for their equally fictional labor relations, GJ mr. Author Man.
seekrat64 t1_iubw11m wrote
Still pretty cruel to abandon him forever.
ThePancakeDocument t1_iu8o4oa wrote
Oh I love this!
Surinical t1_iu8tvw7 wrote
Thank you, friend. I'm glad you liked it.
TheDarkLord0123 t1_iua83yh wrote
Once again, another masterpiece! Do you have a subreddit where all your story’s are collected?
Surinical t1_iuac0o0 wrote
Thank you! Yes, /r/surinical I'm putting together a book of short stories and will post about that there once I publish it.
drsoftware t1_iu8tifm wrote
Great story!
I think you meant to use "staining" in this sentence:
"occluding the false skylight and staging the pastel stucco"
Surinical t1_iu8tqec wrote
Yep, don't know what weird misspelling I did that autocorrected to staging. Thank you!
DailyCreative t1_iu8wthp wrote
The kind of twists i was looking for this morning!
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Surinical t1_iu9b90y wrote
Thanks friend, I'm adapting the best ones into a book of short stories right now. Should be done soon!
superVanV1 t1_iu9qrn7 wrote
I find it amusing that the Demon was the one to say "Holy shit".
Twijasosm t1_iuc6gjg wrote
This was a joy to read and I think I just figured out a way to improve it. Have it so that “John” is actually an acronym for J.O.H.N which can be like “Janitorial Oscillation Homing… something. Basically have him be A type of Wall-e robot that looks hyper realistically human and has been stuck alone on this outpost for hundreds of years at this point. And the reason he was successfully able to summon the Demoness is because over the long years he spent in isolation, he actually developed his own soul.
ShutUpYoureWrong_ t1_iuckvbl wrote
No offense, but that is definitely not an improvement.
Twijasosm t1_iud05ff wrote
To each his own. I still like it.
Edit: also, I love your username
MrRedoot55 t1_iu9rhfm wrote
Nice.
zedkiller10 t1_iuaem1c wrote
Moar?
FalcoholicAnonymous t1_iuah3qq wrote
Moar?
Whiplash17488 t1_iuczwpi wrote
Wow you can write a novel and i’d read it
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