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Roxith OP t1_jdlbb0p wrote

Reply to comment by WhiteNight2505 in [WP] Time stops as a girl with red eyes walks past crowds of people, stabbing one man before giving another person the knife. She starts walking away until you sneeze. by Roxith

Nice story! Your characters have a lot of personality. Their conversations were very smooth between them. It wasn’t awkward but flowed naturally.

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WhiteNight2505 t1_jdnm0ut wrote

Thank you! I was wondering if it was a little too jarringly spontaneous for other people, glad you liked it.

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