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ElsaKit t1_jadcxx9 wrote

Reply to comment by DoomHaven in [WP] "One drip of this poison is enough to kill a whale." The scientist points towards a table, but the beaker isn't there. Instead a silly coffee cup shaped like a beaker sits. You lower the not coffee cup from your mouth. Tastes like lemon-lime. by DistillerCMac

Amazing how his internal monologue changes and you know what happened before it's revealed - perfect example of show don't tell!

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DoomHaven t1_jae5wsz wrote

I really appreciate that compliment, as I think telling and not showing is one of my worst weaknesses.

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ElsaKit t1_jaeo5n3 wrote

Well you did great on it here! Keep practicing and I'm sure you'll gain confidence in your ability soon :)

Good luck!

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