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gregorydgraham t1_iwfpig8 wrote

“I don’t think” - this is weak, you need to pump it up with “only an idiot thinks”

“Worked well” - this is an obvious weasel word (albeit a compound one), avoid slipperiness with “worked at all”.

“They may work better” - this is both weak and weaselly. Try “they only ever work”

“But that may be rare and doesn’t seem to be definitely the case here” - Ay caramba! Do you kiss your girlfriend with those lips? Even “but I don’t think so” would’ve been better

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